deathpilot
June 07, 2005 @ 8:53 pm
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why are you here? | [title of entry]

**NOTE** Okay so I started reviewing this years ago, before my life exploded.. and now that it is summer and a rip van winkle time warp has gone asunder, I'm just going to start over and pretend it's the first time I've ever seen your journal. Deal? Deal.

First Impression: Hm. The layout is kind of pretty... but the immediate content has the propensity to be trite and emo. So we'll see. [3/5]

Navigation: Perfectly clear. As well it should be. [10/10]

Content: (Note: I started reading at Feb. 2) I stick by my first impression in that your writing has, at every turn, the direct possibility of becoming trite and emo. But it never quite does. You have a way with words that keeps your entries interesting and fluid. Plus I like you. Just as a person. You express yourself in the third dimension, manipulating prose in a very straightforward, demi-poetic manner. And you don't explain everything. Or really very much at all. There is extremely little backstory on any of your references, which is good and bad. I don't feel like I pulled your private journal from between your mattress and boxsprings, which is a trait I kind of like in online diaries. But if you're going to be submitting your diary to sites to be read by people who have never met you, you should explain yourself a little more I think.

side note:What a great quote with which to begin reading: "Your hips are still swaying in my mind to the sound of my voice." [23/25]

Layout: It's... well I've seen this type of thing before. And by "I" I mean everyone. The overcast blues, the smoky burned photo edges, the forlorn girl dramatically avoiding the camera with her eyes, what can only be assumed as emo lyrics lining the edges... Eh. But the white text on black is easily readable, so you get brownie points for that. [15/20]

Contact: Email, notes, the usual. [7/10]

Extras: "You," "Loves," "Hates," and "Playlist" right on your layout. Doesn't say a lot about you. And by "a lot" I mean virtually anything. But I like at least half of your playlist, so that's good. The other two I haven't heard of, which is also cool. [3/5]

Updates: Spattered at times, but generally about as regularly as... something regular. Something that is not bathroom humor. Yes. [4/5]

Our Link: Nope. Shame.[0/10]

Errors: Your grammar is almost immaculate. Please marry me.[5/5]

Will I come back? Well you know what? I might. [4/5]

Creativity Bonus Continual references to a muse, or lack thereof. Poetry of sorts. You think like a writer. I like it. [7/10]

Total: [81/100]

Comments? Don't hate your freckles! Freckles are lovely! ::comforts own freckles spanning bridge of nose:: She didn't mean it, really...

Reviewed by: Britt